Heres anther one for ya to contemplate. Comments????

darfur





Kill the children,


Burn their souls.


Strip them naked,


Shoot to kill.





I'm not for sale,


I'm just real.


Trust no one,


You're a coward.





You have no spine,


A common thief.


The kind of person,


I despise.





You stole my honor,


You ruin my name.


You punish me for being human,


My demise, I have no place.








I wrote this for the children of Darfur. No one will speak for these women and children. This is my effort to understand the genocide which threatens thier very existence. I pray for the people of Darfur.

Heres anther one for ya to contemplate. Comments????
it's really sad, but it's also really good...


the rhyming scheme is intersting... sometimes free verse, sometimes rhyme...


i liked it a lot...


i checked a couple of yours around, only have time to write one comment for now...i'll say something more later, if i'm still in time...


i'm wondering, have you ever thought of joining poems and quotes ?


it's an online amateur poetry community...we post poems and read/comment/rate poems by other writers...it's cool there, there are lots of nice poems and i bet you'd get only top ratings...


if you think of it:





http://www.poems-and-quotes.com
Reply:I will pray for them too.


This a wonderful poem. It leaves a sad feeling in my heart. Very emotional. I like it.
Reply:The emotions that were behind this poem were really touching but the poem itself is not that great.
Reply:it's a worthy cause to speak for. or even better, write a good poem for...
Reply:it's a powerful poem, but do be sensitive of who you read it to.
Reply:I admire your writings. I double admire the way you set yourself out there for those to judge. But to get to those that understand what you are feeling, makes it well worth the "unprofessional abuse" you sometimes will hear. For every answer you receive, there is a 100 times more readers out here, which read your poem, and connected with you mentally. They will forever be anonymous! Never let ridicule stop your crusade. :)
Reply:I admire your sentiment, but your poetry is terrible.
Reply:you need a little help on rhyming and the poem was good though
Reply:I love it. It's really powerful and energetic. And I like your purpose for writing it as well.
Reply:I like all of it, it describes what is happening, the feelings are really noticeable in those lines. For me, I admire all, the poem and the source of it.





Marilyn (your angel of San Juan)
Reply:your poem is very good.





speaks alot of emotion.